.....a piano. I walked towards the library room and i found betwen two books an old gold handle. I pulled it hard and a secret passage appeard. I found myself in a dark cave, it was very scary. The sound of the piano was closer and closer, suddenly i found myself in a bright gold room filled with lots of candies and chocolate. The piano was made of Lego! I love my new secret room.
I heard the noise of a train set so I went towards it. I saw a bright orange ball it looked really good to play with. I only did one bounce then a secret passage appeared. The orange ball rolled down the passage. I followed it and I came to a big red door. I could hear music and the train set noise. I opened a door to find a room full of magical toys. I was so excited to play with them.
I had no idea there was a secret room in our house. Not until I heard a scratching noise beneath the stairs. It sounded like a bear trying to escape. I ran to my mum screaming, 'Mum, Mum, I think there is a monster under the stairs!' My mum didn't believe me and thought i was joking. Then when we were walking past the stairs she heard the noise too. My brother and I decided to sniff out what was causing the noise. We got our torches and opened the cupboard. As we stepped inside we notced that the back wall was twisted. It looked like a swing door and behind it was a tiny room filled with boxes and cans. Our cat Pupsie was playing with an empty box.
i had no idea there was a secret room in our house.not until i heard a spooky noise i went down stairs to have a look.i walked further and further i saw shiny bright light as i walked toward's it i found a mysterious door.i tried to open it but it wouldn't budge.soon it was passed my bed time but i didn't care the door said ''enter the code''.i tried many codes but still didn't pass i tried one more i got it correct.the door opened there was a secret room witch i didn't know about i went inside and put the light on i realised it was a new door my dad had fitted to get to garage.
...I walked upstairs but i saw nothing, so i went downstairs suddenly, as i started walking one wall slowly began to open. At that moment i slowly began walking towards the open wall. As soon as i was in, it looked very dark then the wall began to close. I shivered and felt very frightened but i carried on until ....... i saw something shine brightly. I quickly ran towards where it was shining from, then i stopped and stared at it.I could not believe what i saw. gems and Jewels falling everywhere they were as sparkly as a glittering star. My lip began to wobble. Why was it here and how did it get here?
..... suddenly the shut fast behind Bell. I was scared my body shivered. I kept still. As the floor creaked towards me. I tried calling the police but the phone was gone. I saw a big big shadow in the window its eyes glow and his body was green. Bell now panicked. the shadow came closer and closer. Then Bell ran out of the house and never returned .
.....a piano. I walked towards the library room and i found betwen two books an old gold handle. I pulled it hard and a secret passage appeard. I found myself in a dark cave, it was very scary. The sound of the piano was closer and closer, suddenly i found myself in a bright gold room filled with lots of candies and chocolate. The piano was made of Lego! I love my new secret room.
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Wow, that room sounds amazing! I like that you've used a dramatic conjunction in your story. Well done, Giacomo!
DeleteI like your comment Giacomo a lot nice work.
DeleteI heard the noise of a train set so I went towards it. I saw a bright orange ball it looked really good to play with. I only did one bounce then a secret passage appeared. The orange ball rolled down the passage. I followed it and I came to a big red door. I could hear music and the train set noise. I opened a door to find a room full of magical toys. I was so excited to play with them.
ReplyDeleteI had no idea there was a secret room in our house. Not until I heard a scratching noise beneath the stairs. It sounded like a bear trying to escape. I ran to my mum screaming, 'Mum, Mum, I think there is a monster under the stairs!' My mum didn't believe me and thought i was joking.
ReplyDeleteThen when we were walking past the stairs she heard the noise too. My brother and I decided to sniff out what was causing the noise. We got our torches and opened the cupboard. As we stepped inside we notced that the back wall was twisted. It looked like a swing door and behind it was a tiny room filled with boxes and cans. Our cat Pupsie was playing with an empty box.
i had no idea there was a secret room in our house.not until i heard a spooky noise i went down stairs to have a look.i walked further and further i saw shiny bright light as i walked toward's it i found a mysterious door.i tried to open it but it wouldn't budge.soon it was passed my bed time but i didn't care the door said ''enter the code''.i tried many codes but still didn't pass i tried one more i got it correct.the door opened there was a secret room witch i didn't know about i went inside and put the light on i realised it was a new door my dad had fitted to get to garage.
ReplyDelete...I walked upstairs but i saw nothing, so i went downstairs suddenly, as i started walking one wall slowly began to open. At that moment i slowly began walking towards the open wall. As soon as i was in, it looked very dark then the wall began to close. I shivered and felt very frightened but i carried on until ....... i saw something shine brightly. I quickly ran towards where it was shining from, then i stopped and stared at it.I could not believe what i saw. gems and Jewels falling everywhere they were as sparkly as a glittering star. My lip began to wobble. Why was it here and how did it get here?
ReplyDelete..... suddenly the shut fast behind Bell. I was scared my body shivered. I kept still. As the floor creaked towards me. I tried calling the police but the phone was gone. I saw a big big shadow in the window its eyes glow and his body was green. Bell now panicked. the shadow came closer and closer. Then Bell ran out of the house and never returned .
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